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名师点睛:2010年SAT作文回顾和展望

2010年05月21日09:24苏州新东方学校邹燕萍我要评论(0)
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一、回顾篇

1、2010年5月作文题目

Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?

首先审题,理解成创新类别,也就是让各位考生写一个因为创新所以成功的故事。同笔者课上复习的这个题目很类似:Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today? 怎么回答呢?结合5月考题,自然是需要创造力,因为有了能成功。

归纳来看,结合去年下半年的考题,大家会发现,美国考官一直在对这个问题进行考察。比如去年11月要不要挑战新想法,你可以写不要,因为新想法就是创造力会让大家成功。去年12月考要不要挑战权威,自然是写要,挑战权威,提出新想法,个人和社会才会更好。再看今年5月份,还是强调不要从众,要有自己的个性。

我给大家找了一篇满分作文,写的是失败到成功的故事,大家可以参考。

This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, "Cat on a Hot Tin Roof." To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylor's mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance. (背景)

I auditioned for the part of “Maggie” feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor, however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didn‘t get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see “Maggie” from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylor’s.(失败的记忆)

I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress, in order to create my character. (从失败中经验教训)

Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simon's "Rumors," and would get the opportunity to play "Chris," a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there. (准备过程)

My director told me after the first show that “Rumors” was the best work he‘d ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how I’d developed such a believable character. (成功)

实战演练:接下来我们来做一个工作,就着这个素材来写5月的题目。Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?

大家从题目里面找到两个重点,一个是不同,一个是成功,需要用细节去细化。接下来围绕这两个点,结合例子素材,整出例子的思路链条。

例子思路:背景(参演学校话剧的演出)——为了成功,看Taylor 的演出,为了做到和她一模一样(点题)——失败——安排导演宣布失败理由(完全没有体现出自己的个性,要有不同)——痛定思痛——准备下一次演出——强调自己的个性(点出题目的difference),按照自己的方式给出这个觉得的声音包括表演方式——成功(安排导演讲出)

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This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, "Cat on a Hot Tin Roof." To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch a relevant movie starred by Elizabeth Taylor in order to prepare. For two hours I studied her mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.

I auditioned for the part of “Maggie” feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor; however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didn‘t get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see “Maggie” from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylor’s.

I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress. Instead, it is imperative to find out my difference, namely, my unique way of acting, in playing a new role. (点题)

Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simon's "Rumors," and would get the opportunity to play "Chris," a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my own character, I placed emphasis on originality(点题), planning out her life just as I thought it should be, giving her the voice I thought was right; naturally, the rest of her character was unfolded beautifully from there. (准备过程)

Then I went for another try. (加强过渡)After the first show my director told me that “Rumors” was the best work he‘d ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how I’d developed such a believable and different(点题) character. (成功)

2、2010年1月作文话题

Do people make the greatest discoveries by exploring what is unfamiliar to them or by paying close attention to what seems familiar?

关于审题,这是一个难题。同学们在考场上需要从脑海里面把准备的例子迅速想一遍,看看哪个更适合此题目。由于限定了discovery, 笔者班上的同学们应该能快速想到伽利略或者哥白尼。前者做出了伟大的发现,比如两球下降的正确理论;后者发现了日心说。

以前者为例,他发现的理论很明显是符合题干中的后者的,因为两球下降之前就有过相关理论,他对此熟悉的理论做了分析研究,最终有了正确的伟大的发现。

还是给大家找一篇文章作为素材的参考,写作者是Lily 同学,去年6月考试作为是满分,习作的题目是is it necessary to question the authority?

Another story of Galileo is also a very typical one to explain the importance of challenging the authority. It is known to us all that Aristotle is a great philosopher in ancient Greece and is widely regarded as the most erudite mind so far. His theories, as a result, are firmly believed by almost everyone in the Middle Age. (塑造权威)

However, Galileo, a talented physicist at that time, found one of Aristotle’s theories that the velocities of two falling weights are proportional to their weights incorrect through his thousands of experiments. (为什么挑战)

He finally decided to show his research results by doing an experiment on the Leaning Tower of Pisa in front of the public, which later turned out to be a blockbuster in the field of physics.

Galileo dropped two iron balls of different weights to the ground and everybody present witnessed the historic moment that the two balls reached the ground at exactly the same time. (怎么挑战)

Galileo’s experiments and discoveries violently challenged that of Aristotle and started a revolutionary debate among scientists. More importantly, he corrected thousands of people’s wrong beliefs and contributed a lot to the modern physics. (挑战的结果)

实战运用:题目 Do people make the greatest discoveries by exploring what is unfamiliar to them or by paying close attention to what seems familiar?

我们先确认观点:应该研究看上去熟悉的。关键字:研究看上去熟悉的——重大发现。接下来写出例子的基本思路:

背景(亚里士多德是权威)---提出了两球下降理论(速度和质量成正比)——伽利略(Pisa大学毕业后,开始大量阅读书籍)——研究公众十分熟悉,并且基本公认的理论——两球下降理论——认为没有经过试验检测,不可靠——比萨斜塔实验——结果,两球同时落地——伟大的发现(正确的理论——速度和质量部成正比)——科学界的突破,打破对于权威的盲目相信,实验科学的创始人。

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Another story of Galileo is also a very typical one to explain the importance of exploring what is familiar to us. It is known to us all that Aristotle is a great philosopher in ancient Greece and is widely regarded as the most erudite mind so far. His theories, as a result, are firmly believed by almost everyone in the Middle Age. Among all these theories, one theory that the velocities of two falling weights are proportional to their weights enjoyed widespread familiarity among the public. (点题)(熟悉的东西是什么)

At that time, Galileo, an unknown scientist, was absorbed in books of Aristotle. However, instead of totally copying the thoughts of him, Galileo developed his own way of thinking and gave priority to the effect of experimentation on science, doubting the feasibility of the widely known(点题)theory about the speed of falling objects. (伽利略研究熟悉的东西)

He finally decided to find out the truth by doing an experiment on the Leaning Tower of Pisa in front of the public. During the experiment, Galileo dropped two iron balls of different weights to the ground and everybody present witnessed the historic moment that the two balls reached the ground at exactly the same time. (伽利略挑战熟悉的理论)

That experiment witnessed the birth of one of the greatest discoveries in the field of science, namely, the theory that the velocities of two falling objects are not related to their weights. More important is the fact that this finding weakens the blind trust of the public toward the authority and paved the way for the widespread use of experimentation in testing the practicability of a theory.(营造这是伟大的发现)

二、展望篇

回顾过去几场考试,可以发现college board 十分青睐挑战权威和提出新想法这个主题,既然如此青睐,各位参加6月考试的考生还是应该额外关注。其他类别包括物质类别,个人价值观判断等。 接下来给大家罗列一些重点话题,以供参考。

6月考试重点一:创新类

Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today?

参考思路:大家要注意today 这个措辞。此题适合准备个人例子。有了创造力,才能distinguish yourself from others, 不妨借鉴班上一个马来西亚同学说过一的学生会竞选的有趣故事。他说最后获胜者提出了很creative 的东西来吸引学生,比如:

1)(boarding school) shopping, once a month 一月安排一次集体购物,他们是寄宿学校。

2) (Single-sex education ) ball, invite the girls in the girls-school, 一周安排一次集体舞会,要求女校学生参加。这就是与众不同啊。

重点二:物质类别

Is it more important to do work that one finds fulfiling or work that pays well?

参考思路:比较难写的题目。较容易额方法是些赚钱重要,因为挣了钱才能实现梦想,获得fulfilling.

开头段:Working for a well-paid job is more important. When one can get a considerable income, he can utilize this amount of wealth to do those things he finds fulfilling. The King of Steel, Andrew Carnegie, is one example that can prove the above point of view.

中间框架: 卡内基童年贫苦——只能读夜校——因此希望帮助更多人读上书——努力工作——内战买了钢的专利权——建了公司——赚了钱——实现梦想——投生教育事业。

参考:童年艰苦 Andrew Carnegie had an arduous childhood: as the age of 13, as an emigrant from Scotland to America, he squeezed in an incredibly tiny apartment with other immigrants. He struggled for his survival, finding a job in one factory after another. Having no access to welfare, to education and medical services, he was deprived of all basic rights.

营造童年梦想Living under this extreme poverty, Andrew Carnegie knew and understood so deeply about the torture within, and he developed a dream to provide a better live for the poor.

营造挣钱Andrew Carnegie took great notice of the business world and his sharp discernment paid him back. During the Civil War, Andrew Carnegie discovered the potential of steel industry and thus bought a patent of steel to operate his own company.

Over 20 thousand employees

A market share of 65%

An annual income of $40 million

横线部分过渡是重点,营造赚钱和满足感的关系:It was this well-paid job that made Andrew Carnegie’s childhood dream come true. With the wealth he had accumulated, he fulfilled his youthful ‘ambition’ by making his contribution to the realms of philanthropy.

营造梦想的实现Paying special attention to libraries and higher education, Carnegie invested in building of many local libraries and Carnegie Mellon University. These efforts changed many American’s lives, offering their invaluable knowledge.

议论部分:

1 总结例子For the example of Andrew Carnegie, we can see that he had made use of his fortune from a well-paid job to do what he urged to do and to achieve a sense of fulfillment.

2 表述观点 Therefore, it is more important to have a well-paid job so that we can accomplish our dreams relying on the wealth we gained from our work.

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