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With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers. But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful .Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”. You can give some examples and facts to support your opinion. Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.

The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers

李彦妮

辽宁市鞍山市第一中学10届14班

Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particular kind is actually taking place around us. In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings. It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.

The computers can make a great help for us in this high speed society. In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that can make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you. In a word, we can't live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.

On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents. First of all, sitting in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes. On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments. Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world. Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him. I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.

According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides. Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon. We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdom - computers.

专家建议:

本文个别语言使用不够地道并且偶尔出现句子表意不明的情况,因此建议该考生在平时的学习中尽量多阅读原汁原味的英语(论坛)文章,有意识地积累地道的英语表达,不断提高语言运用能力。

专家点评:

本篇文章段落结构基本清晰,第一段交代文章主题,第二段主要说明计算机的优势,第三段罗列计算机给人们带来的害处,最后一段是对文章的总结和作者个人看法,整篇文章思路比较清晰。文章用词较为准确,也出现了不少词组及句型,语法多样性也有所体现。能看出这绝对是高中生中佼佼者完成的文章。不足之处在于有个别语言点不够地道,希望以后能进一步雕琢语言,使写作水平进一步提升。

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